In this modern age, highly innovative technological gadgets have been introduced in all over the world such as LCD TV, Laptops, Desktop computer, iPhone, iPad, smart phones, play station and much more. Today there are majority of children are interested to watch television or playing games on the computer and ignoring to play outdoor games like football, swimming, lawn tennis, cricket, table tennis and basketball. This problem is creating miserable results for the future. There are some reason drawbacks and solutions with this kind of group sample. However, I personally think with that outdoor activity is much better than indoor stuffs.
Today, most of the parents can afford to buy electronic gadgets like a tv and computer for their children and concurrently they are also spoiling their kids by allowing them to use those electronic items each day. Furthermore, guardains are also not giving enough time to their child because they try to give main attention to their professional job. Therefore, this is the main reason that due to lack of encouragement and care from parents, many kids are having less interest in the playground activities and simultaneously they might get physically and mentally weak whilst utilizing more hour in electronic stuffs. This consequence displays dismissive development because the younger generation are the present and future of the nation. So, if they don’t give attention to participate in the outdoor activity, they will not be able to compete in this competitive business world.
Besides that prolonged staying indoors lessen children's chances for social interaction with their friends or having gatherings with their family members. This is essential because it assists kids to maintain a healthy mindset. It helps them to build up a positive mood to carry on with other tasks.
In solution, the main factor is parents should make strict rules on their kids like time table. For instance, by giving specific time to use gadgets and more hours in outdoor activities to their children. In an additional, they also have to involve to play with their kids. Thus, this strategy not only makes more active to their child, it also keeps mental and physical health strong.
To sum up, I strongly believe with that outdoor activity brings beneficial outcomes than indoor tasks. There should be plan a time schedule on using gadgets at home and outdoor activities. Moreover, parents also have to look forward on their kids hobby and health concomitantly. To add more, they should be engages to do outdoor tasks with their children together in order to encourage and motivate them. Consequently, their kids will be more likely to spend their time in playground activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'majorities'?
Suggestion: majorities
... station and much more. Today there are majority of children are interested to watch tel...
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Line 3, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uch better than indoor stuffs. Today, most of the parents can afford to buy el...
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Line 9, column 121, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'planned'?
Suggestion: planned
...omes than indoor tasks. There should be plan a time schedule on using gadgets at hom...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 439.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21867881549 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66223971523 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562642369021 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8855495893 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.136363636 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269059480699 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809863504752 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465483008248 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156371480596 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390359727141 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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