It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together?
Families, which form the base for socialisation, are not as bonded as they had been in earlier days. It is undeniable that the bonding between the members of the family is weakening gradually during the course of time.
The primary reason is time spent together with the family has shrunk. In the rat race to achieve materialistic prosperity, everyone in the family started working in different places, so it is quite evident that they hardly have quality time with each other. For instance, if both parents in a family are the breadwinners then it is obvious that their words would be left aloof most of the time. Thus the space left for love and affection to blossom in such a nuclear family has become less frequent.
Another connected reason is the addiction to electronic gadgets .This contemporary world drives people to become technophilic. Despite having leisure time, these days it appears that it is not well spent with the loved ones because of laptops and smartphones. This is because these gadgets have access to the internet which in turn opens ways for social networking sites like Facebook and YouTube. Thus there is a larger probability that the citizens might get hooked and engrossed .Since these consume more time, the time spent with family has lessened.
With regard to the suggestions to bind the families together, it is recommended that if everyone decides to be with their family every weekend then definitely it would compensate the time they worked round the clock throughout the week. Therefore, in my opinion, this weekend bonds might even make individuals emotionally more attached to other members of the family and could strengthen their relationship.
To conclude, most of the populaces are deprived of time for spending with their families either because of aspiration for materialism or addiction to gadgets .This has made a dramatic change that the family members are not as closer to each other like years ago, so it is suggested to spend weekends with family to make up their relationship.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s would be left aloof most of the time. Thus the space left for love and affection t...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n is the addiction to electronic gadgets .This contemporary world drives people to...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: .
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Since
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Suggestion: .
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in my opinion, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02071005917 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65856513152 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529585798817 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.5393376498 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.538461538 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221533723994 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830884650638 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549230977188 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131083809818 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056970752889 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.