The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"Last week, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation,sincethe corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
The argument proposes to modify the showerheads in order to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. By doing so the corporation believes to reduce water consumption which in turn will decrease the water bills and drive profits. The author however fails to make a persuasive command and goes onto build his argument on the foundation of unwarranted assumptions.
A major flaw in the argument is the belief that by reducing water flow to one-third will also reduce the amount of water consumed. If the amount of water required to bath is twenty litres, then it will remain the same but will only increase the time to bath because of such low water pressure. Also since no data is available on amount of water usage before and after the change, wide scale application of such an action can lead to huge losses. Since the manger plans to scale this to all twelve buildings, he must have some quantifiable data to bolster his actions.
Morevoer the argument belives that people are only using showerheads. Thus, ignoring the population who may be using faucets or bathtubs. Thus the strategy of changing showerheads fail, if a majority of people don't use showerheads. Infact, if the larger part of populace does not use showerheads then the water bill will not reduce by much an amount, and the corporation would have to bear the extra cost of buying the showerheads and employing workforce to change them.
Also, since the number of complaints for low pressure in shower heads has been diminutive does not strengthen the assumption that people are not facing a problem with this change. Replacing a showerhead is not a tedious task nor does it require a lot of skill. It can be done by a teenager as well. Therefore many people using showerheads, might have just
bought showerheads with diffrent designs which allow a greater water flow. Thus the amount spent by the corporation
in pursuing such change would be rendered superfluous.
Thus, before taking its actions from three to twelve buildings the manager must have reliable data about the water readings. Also a decision can only prove its worth if there is an approximate idea of thr proportion of the population using
showerheads. Therefore, the argument falls apart because of many looholes in mangers assumption.
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- The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager."Last week, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to on 63
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1869 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.792 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.996 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o reduce water consumption which in turn will decrease the water bills and drive ...
^^
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wever fails to make a persuasive command and goes onto build his argument on the ...
^^
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: TO_BATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to bathe'?
Suggestion: to bathe
...nsumed. If the amount of water required to bath is twenty litres, then it will remain t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...litres, then it will remain the same but will only increase the time to bath beca...
^^
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: TO_BATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to bathe'?
Suggestion: to bathe
...e same but will only increase the time to bath because of such low water pressure. Als...
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Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ressure. Also since no data is available on amount of water usage before and afte...
^^
Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pplication of such an action can lead to huge losses. Since the manger plans to s...
^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...n who may be using faucets or bathtubs. Thus the strategy of changing showerheads fa...
^^^^
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...owerheads fail, if a majority of people dont use showerheads. Infact, if the larger ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is change. Replacing a showerhead is not a tedious task nor does it require a lot...
^^
Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
.... It can be done by a teenager as well. Therefore many people using showerheads, might ha...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 76, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...signs which allow a greater water flow. Thus the amount spent by the corporation in...
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Line 11, column 126, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...reliable data about the water readings. Also a decision can only prove its worth if ...
^^^^
Line 11, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f thr proportion of the population using showerheads. Therefore, the argument fal...
^^^
Line 12, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of many looholes in mangers assumption.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, third, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9383033419 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66875687693 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539845758355 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3793143898 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.105263158 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118794462329 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379456579355 0.0743258471296 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413931289062 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0554039575927 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404296316202 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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