Children are spending increasingly time on playing computer games, mobile phones and surfing the internet, and people think they are becoming more difficult to education because of this. However, I believe modern technology makes it easier for parents and teachers to educate children, since the internet, computers and cell phones provide so much material for kids' education.
Firstly, the time children spend doing things other than listen to lessons is helpful for them to gain more knowledge. This kind of knowledge cannot be offered by teachers in classes and even children's parents, since information travels so fast that none of the adults could gain, digest, and transfer information as quickly as the internet via modern technologies. Teachers' main mission has changed, from transferring knowledge to teaching learning methods that would be beneficial for childs' self-teaching. Hence, children should be encouraged to spend more time on gaining messages from websites or other ways because they have to learn that ability anyway in the future.
Moreover, educating children has been required for a higher quality than before, so modern technology cannot be blamed for the harder task from primary school teachers. After the realization of the importance of primary education, parents are asking more attention on this development of early education in kids' childhood. Thus, more qualified teachers are required, and the teachers are under the pressure of enhancing their teaching capability, which indicates that children are harder to teach and control nowadays. Consequently, no matter whether children are spending lots of time focusing on cell phones, education of children is becoming more and more difficult.
Although mobile phones, computer games, and social network occupy a large proportion of children's time, some failures of today's primary education cannot be blamed on these facilities, since the main purpose of school and home education in this time period is to teach young students how to become better men/ women. Adults can teach children the sense of respect, considerate, confidence using modern technology, by showing online videos, explaining news, even creating new computer games. Children can learn cooperation by playing computer games when they have to do teamwork, and they can understand the knowledge more deeply when they are taught something they have already learnt on the internet. In this case, the modern technology will do more benefit than harmfulness.
In conclusion, the rapid development of modern technology gives a wonderful opportunity to school teachers and parents to improve their way of former education to children.
- TPO-41 - Integrated Writing Task Burning coal in power plants produces a waste product called coal ash, a material that contains small amounts of potentially harmful chemicals. Environmentalists in the United States are concerned about the damage such har 70
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. 66
- Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games and social networking websites. 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Children are spending increasingly time ...
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...that ability anyway in the future. Moreover, educating children has been re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, so, thus, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55231143552 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73071623793 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535279805353 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.1218306244 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.133333333 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320359971837 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111020369454 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712933112755 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173794504453 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642584827378 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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