Some people believe that in order to reduce crimes, prisoners should be given longer prison sentences while some people think there are other alternative ways.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, an increasing number of crime has been a serious worldwide issue. It is argued by many commentators that the people who commit crime should receive longer prison sentences in order to diminish crime rates. Whereas, others believe we should take other measures, instead. Although the former opinion might be true, I strongly support the latter one.
To begin with, it is possible to reduce the offences by focusing on preventative measurements. In a light manner, we can activate a governmental security system which sets up more CCTV and arrange the extra number of security guards to target the dangerous spots or streets. A good exemplification of this is a Night Security system run by the local council and citizens in South Korea. This is where a group of volunteers walk citizens safely home in the risky areas. However, the security system might not cover all high-risky situations and might cost the earth for the governments.
In the second place, it is advisable to use advertisements for educational purposes to prevent felonies. That is to say, viewers will be familiar with civil moralities and minimal values required as citizens by spreading the message on air. For instance, NSW, Australia witnessed a significant drop in juvenile crime rate in 2018 after broadcasting a public advertisement dealing with juvenile delinquencies. Although this might be effective, the young are more likely to get affected by negative contents from the Internet.
Last but not least, the government should apply stricter regulation for drug and alcohol use. As people are under the effect of alcoholic and mind-bending substances, they are prone to commit crimes. Even worse, they would not notice and have no recognition of their own behaviour. Therefore, it is definitely vital to control such issues. For instance, Queensland, Australia has a strict rule when it comes to serving alcohol in venues. By law, it is prohibited to serve rapid intoxication drinks from midnight to protect citizens from potential crimes caused by the unconscious violence. Nevertheless, it is almost impossible to monitor drinking at home.
In a nutshell, my conclusion is that other measurements should be considered to reduce crimes instead of extending prison years. This is, again, emphasized by government run security systems, publishing educational advertisement on air and the instruction of stricter regulation for drug and alcohol use. Behind bars (instead of prison) Nowadays the laws we have, criminals get away with murder.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, to begin with, in the second place, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31920199501 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97771901458 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60349127182 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8472768407 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7391304348 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4347826087 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134252495964 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353396367408 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573196747533 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794230128694 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755856580057 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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