non-traditional subjects such as music, art and acting should be considered as equally as other traditional subjects in primary schools.
Some argue that non-traditional subjects such as music, art and acting should be considered as equally as other traditional subjects in primary schools. This essay totally disagrees with the statement because these subjects are not important for basic survival and the employment opportunities are not ample.
To begin with, traditional subjects such as literature, mathematics and science are far more important than non-academic subjects. Academic subjects should be given importance and added as a mandatory part of the school curriculum. These subjects are essential for the basic survival of life. It will create a negative impact on pupils if they could not do basic addition or subtraction. People essentially deal with numbers every day. For instance, a person would not be hired in an interview if he is not capable of doing even a simple calculation.
The other alarming factor is poverty and unemployment. The job opportunity for a musician or an artist is very minimal compared to an engineer or a doctor. Not every individual can become a great musician or artist as Beethoven or Mona Lisa. The probability of success is very scarce. This will eventually lead to poverty and stress for both the individual and the family. A recent survey by Modern Times magazine has stated that the number of suicides by an artist because of unemployment have increased up to 33% across the globe. Hence it is advised to add these subjects as extra-curricular subjects and not mandatory subjects.
To conclude, the non-technical subjects can be included in the curriculum as optional; whereas the technical subjects should be given high priority because of the ample employment opportunity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
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Line 5, column 534, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e increased up to 33% across the globe. Hence it is advised to add these subjects as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, whereas, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26199261993 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05554663613 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568265682657 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4230461395 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.125 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410230330467 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118221752991 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.219041588106 0.0667982634062 328% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279028162484 0.151304729494 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.217830894648 0.056905535591 383% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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