some people believe that technology has a major effect on young people and role of parents declined,while others have another point of view.
discuss both views and give your opinion.
Raising children is a complicated issue especially with the technological upheaval that we face nowadays. That is why some people are of the belief that parents have the major impact on their children regardless of the surrounding circumstances , while others think that the virtual world of social media , exported images through TV, and famous people compete with the caretakers for that role. I am of the view that despite the technological progress and rapid life rhythm , mothers and fathers should monitor their offspring and guide them to the right pathways because this will keep the balance and make them able to face challenges of this age. The following lines will elicit both points of view and my opinion.
To commence, some individuals consider that the family is the corner stone of children upbringing. This is because family members represent the closest image of the role model in the mind of the child and is the main protector against the wind of change that attacked our life. For instance, according to a study published in 2002 about the role of morals and principles in surpassing hindrances , youngsters in whom good behavior and attitudes have been instilled, have capabilities to be responsible and aware of dangers that they will face one day. In addition, the presence of a powerful nuclear family improves the psychological well-being. As a result, it is recommended that the authorities support the family role and increase the awareness about the importance of being surrounded with a beloved and a good family.
On the other hand, others deem that the family role is outdated and that media , televisions , actors , singers and football players are able to manipulate future generation's minds and shape their personalities. In other words, they present a lot of their notions and opinions through their clothes , speeches and performances. Therefore, they are able to change the children mindset. However, this manipulation is not necessarily a change to the worst. Mohamed Salah, for example, is a role model to a lot of teenagers and shared in a campaign against drug addiction. On the other side, Mohamed Ramadan ,who is an actor, played a lot of roles in which he showed aggressiveness and used weapons as if this is the normal situation in our culture. Hence he might ruin a lot of teenagers' morals and social traditions. Therefore, it is suggested that governments should keep eyes on what is presented through movies ,series ,and advertisements.
In conclusion. it can be reiterated that morals originate from the family but with technology and increasing life rhythm these values face some impediments. This is because famous persons and ideas which are presented through media and social media platforms may shake up the basics and rules. I am a staunch believer that technology and the open world are indispensible but those should be under the continuous monitoring by the guardians and the governments to be sure that the played materials fit our habits and customs and support the instilled moral and rules.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 10.4138276553 307% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1615.20841683 158% => OK
No of words: 500.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.114 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86884647299 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 176.041082164 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 506.74238477 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.0765441026 49.4020404114 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.85 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173271381989 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427363708023 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554098250139 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102151674079 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783741696609 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 78.4519038076 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.