Some people say that computer games are bad for children by all means their believe that these games are contributing to children development.
Now discuss other views and opinion.
Several individuals believe that playing computer games, juveniles will obtain more drawbacks rather than benefits since it is being one of the contributing-factors of adolescents growth. In according to this issue, I will explain the opposite view of this statement.
I do appreciate of some arguments which believed that by playing games in computer will render less advantages to children. Nevertheless, we, moreover, have to see something from unusual sides. I do believe that this modern technology, computer, also gives numerous positive influences to youngsters. For instance, First and foremost, in developing states which does not speak another language except their own language, if those children play computer games which conduct something like this, it will, absolutely, confer countless excellent information about foreign language to them. Second but not less crucial, in this temporary era, playing computer games, which is already connected to the internet globally, is also able to give adolescents an opportunity to meet a new friend that will impact to their societal enhancement.
To make all those positive feedbacks happen, we, as grown-ups, have to control and monitor our next generation of playing games. we need to manage which games are terrific for splendid development of children and which games are not recommended to be played by juveniles. Besides controlling, monitoring, and managing, as adults, we are supposed to educate adolescents about selecting something, include playing computer games, which is good for their improvements.
By way of conclusion, it seems to me that playing computer games are not merely providing negative impacts, nonetheless, it, additionally, is capable of giving other positive feedbacks to children. Therefore, in order to render more positive feedbacks to children, we as mature individuals have to do all of those suggestions as I already wrote above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun advantages is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended being'.
Suggestion: recommended being
...ent of children and which games are not recommended to be played by juveniles. Besides controllin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58703071672 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08172416744 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590443686007 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1125770052 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.416666667 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22340881545 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865862547088 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692483910463 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135531317899 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366604834244 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.