Over past century, since the technological development has taken an unstoppable pace, one topic has been discussed excessively with regards to this development. Are these technological advances really a boon to the human kind or they are a malediction. A plethora of opinions have been put forward by the intellectuals over the ages in favor as well as in opposition to this issue. In my opinion, I consider it is meant to simplify our lives and it is doing just fine abiding by its mere objective of its creation. In further paragraphs, I present justification in order to bolster my stand.
The paramount purpose of developing new technological advances is to simplify or automate certain tasks that humans find difficult to perform or may possibly create a blunder in completing those tasks which might be unaffordable in certain cases. Taking as example, the self driving cars are developed to automate the driving experience, in order to make it more safe and systematic. Take in account of long tiring drives, in which people tend to slumber amidst of highway which may lead to lethal accidents costing their lives. Such cars have such facilities to tackle with such situations, in which they automatically switch to self driving mode or alert the driver to pull over. Now is this complicating our lives by adding more years to our lifespan, I don't think so. Taking another example of the mobile phones the objective of inventing these gadgets was to be able to communicate to whole world at the press of a button or in today's world touch of a finger. And in my opinion, it is performing this task efficiently. We can book an appointment to a restaurant, doctor etc. by a phone call which is simplifying our lives by sparing us precious time.
Now in contrast to above justification, an argument can be presented that mobile phones are taking away our social lives, pushing us further away from real lives. Everything has its pros and cons. To counter the above argument, I would say that this infamous social media is helping in making us more aware about the major events happening the corners of the world. It has made the world smaller. We get to about the calamities happening around the world and to which people help in recovering people from such catastrophes by sending help from around the globe. It is this social media that is helping people worldwide by spreading the word around the globe. So it is onto us whether we take it as a boon or a malediction.
To conclude I would like to say that the technology is definitely simplifying our lives as it was meant to be. We cannot blame a piece of technology for complicating our lives if we are the ones who keep introducing unnecessary additions to a piece of technology gadget vacillating from root objective of simplification for which it was invented.
- Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws. 66
- To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. 50
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. 58
- Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. 58
- Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study in a group. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...the technological development has taken a unstoppable pace, one topic has been di...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'may', 'possibly'.
Suggestion: may; possibly
...hat humans find difficult to perform or may possibly create a blunder in completing those ta...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'may'.
Suggestion: may
...hat humans find difficult to perform or may possibly create a blunder in completing those ta...
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Line 3, column 758, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...by adding more years to our lifespan, I dont think so. Taking another example of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, so, well, as to, in contrast, as well as, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 488.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79918032787 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88907102533 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497950819672 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9864073767 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.826086957 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2173913043 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04347826087 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176764464043 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499618709385 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746041372726 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10747213298 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386768971466 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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