The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Other believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children’s health. To what extent do you agree with these view? (RE-WRITE)
Throughout the history, anthropological studies show Queen Inhapy, Hatshepsut and King Ramses III who were the most famous and the earliest proof of overweight people. During that time, it was assumed that the more people weighed, represented a higher rank in social status. Unfortunately, this extra weight for some people who live in modern era may cause health problems. In developed countries, the number of overweight children, for example, grows faster. This presently comes from the majority of growing fast food and parents who neglected children's health. Analyzing these issues to unfold th...
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anthropological studies show Queen Inhapy, Hatshepsut and King Ramses III who were the most famous and the earliest proof of overweight people.
anthropological studies show that Queen Inhapy, Hatshepsut and King Ramses III were the most famous and the earliest proof of overweight people.
Most children buy something is not suitable for their health
Most children buy something which are not suitable for their health
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