Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Currently, due to the impressive development of technology, people can be monitored in everywhere for any purposes without any notice. Although I agree that there are benefit of this development, I believe that there are more serious drawbacks.
It seems positive that hidden monitor equipments can be very helpful when crimes happen in that spaces. Becuase, detectors and police can catch the criminals by using them. For instance, if the crime scene was recorded by security cameras, the figure of criminal could be checked and it might give some advantages to police.
However, it can be used to support criminals and actually in the reality that happens all the time nowdays. There are so many cases that sexual criminals put micro-camera in public toilet of women and record the whole situations happened in stalls. There is also another case of abusing monitor equipments. By using cellphone tracking, criminals can take private informations of people and then use them to take tons of money off from them.
Besides, monitoring people can also invade private and human's right in work place. Especially in Korea, employers monitor their employees without any notice and tease their workers when they try to take a break time because the employers just want employees to work only. That take away human's right from workers, which is to be guaranted.
For the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the drawbacks of technology development about monitoring people outweigh its benefits because there are so many possibilities to be used in the wrong way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18823529412 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65457466051 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596078431373 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0573859238 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.769230769 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24874484011 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852748948154 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515552930346 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143661980883 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038743431211 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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