Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples t
Without a shadow of the doubt, education play a vital role in children's destiny. Children are the backbone of society and the way we breed them can be very influential in social improvement and progress. Many people contend that educatig children is an easy task today, while others assert that with so much time they spend on useless things like online games it is a very difficult task. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that educating kids is a very hard task to do. In the ensuing paragraphs, I delve into many reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that nowadays, there are a lot of unbeneficial programs for children that can waste children's time. Unfortunately, most of these programs like online games and social networking Websites are eye catching and these programs can easiliy absorb children. Most of the children spent many of their precious time on these programs. So, they do not enoygh time to do their school's homework. As you can see, educating is a complex matter.
Another point springing to mind is that in changing world that we have faced it, people can achieve their goals without going to schools or universities. For example, there are a lot of seccessful person that abandoned universities and in spite of what we think they are very famous for doing a lot of creative things like Jobes or Ali Dae. Ali dae is a creative man in my country who developed a unique tool for purifying dirty water. This person abandoned university because he believed there is no thing valuable to learn in uuniversities for him. As a result, people can do their favorite activities like playing onlone games or even spent their time on cell phones and still can be succeed. So, we can not persuade children to follow routine education. Althou these are the first ones cross to the mine, this is not the only reason possible. The noteworthy study conducted on 100 children for 10 years demonstrated that children who spent 3 hours on playing online games or surfing on Web sites are easy for managing because they aremore creative in comparison with other kids and they follow the rules. This study was done among a small community and we most consider that for reaching to a accurate idea we need a broad spectrum of samples. Also, a good syudy would take decades and it is not easy finding people whou would want to take part.
To sum it all up by taking all the details into consideration, it is easy to see that today educating is very challenging and hard task to do. People waste their time on doing nonsense activities, also they can be succeed in their goals without going to universities like Jobs. I hope so some day all children can pursue their dreams without any limitations.
- TOEFL TPO 28- Integrated Writing Task 42
- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TOEFL T P O 45 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- tpo 26 Integrated task 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'nothing'?
Suggestion: nothing
...university because he believed there is no thing valuable to learn in uuniversities for ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1195, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d we most consider that for reaching to a accurate idea we need a broad spectrum ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, still, while, for example, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74552683897 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61829554185 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508946322068 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8259380066 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4583333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9583333333 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243838615208 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668857059751 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581807902096 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155741293286 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430436634146 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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