tpo 12-integrated writing
The passage discusses that there is not document that we know what Jane Austen looked like. But, recently a full-length portrait of a teenage girl has come up for sale and many asserts that the woman in the painting is Jane. The passage provides three reasons to support that. However, the professor rejects all these reasons by stating that none of them are convincing.
Firet, the article claims several decades after Jane;s death her family used a portrait in an edition of her letters. Her family believes this portrait is Jane. In contrast the lecture refutes this idea by explaining that, the portrait prepared many years after the Jane's death and there is possible that none of her families see her. So, their claim is nonesens.
Second, the reading says that the face in the painting is very similar to the Cassandras's sketch, which is obvious depicts Jane in her adaulthood. However, the professor rebuts this idea by stating that Austen's family was big and there were many teenage girl in that family. So, the girl in the painting could be one of those girls and similarity between siblings is not weird. So, the text's reason is not believable. Third, the text claims that there is a document that the painting was painted when Jane was a teenager. While, the teacher rejects this idea by saying that investigations on vanvas show taht the material that applyed in the painting was not available when Jane was a teenager. Also, the talk says that the painting's material was in the market when Jane was older. As you can see, the girl in the painting is not Jane.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 165, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...mily believes this portrait is Jane. In contrast the lecture refutes this idea by explai...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...g was painted when Jane was a teenager. While, the teacher rejects this idea by sayin...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, second, so, third, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1300.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 275.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72727272727 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34505704877 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509090909091 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.0 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5550484654 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.25 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 7.06452816374 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430030398309 0.272083759551 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13455927259 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816979286841 0.0662205650399 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267044160101 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312730335352 0.0443174109184 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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