there is no doubt that in the contemporary era, there is a variety of topics and news happened in every corner of the world, and no one could deny this fact. A vast majority of people are of the opinion that news is the indispensable part of their life because in this way they can anticipate what is going to happen, and prepare themselves for it. I, contrary to popular belief, contend that it is not suitable to follow the events around the world. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples to explicate my vantage point.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first is that if you want to allot time to pursue the events, you will lose much more time. To shed light on this issue, take my father as an example. When he open the TV or his social media such as Twitter, he begins to surf all the news and events, no matter how it is important. At the end of the day, he wonders how he allocates his time to watching the unuseful news, such as Jenifer Lopez’s wedding party. As we can see, the events are consist of various kind from political news to details of celebrities' life. Had the eminent people spent time on these type of events, they would not have been able to improve their knowledge in their special fields.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance on this subject is that the more you spend your time to pursuing these events, the more you are exposed to depression and anxiety. A study was conducted by a group of social problems' researchers at Oxford University on the source of recent innovations. Its results indicated that more than 80 percent of people following all of the events all around the world suffer from depression and anxiety. It undoubtedly demonstrates that when you have more concerns in your life, such as quitting England from Brex, you are vulnerable enough to get the mental disease and may cause behavioral problems.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and samples lead us to the conclusion that it would be better if you spend less time to follow the events. However, that was a story in nutshell. Actually, there are more reasons and examples elaborating on this idea which are not mentioned here due to the shortage of time. Finally, it is suggested that government have to confirm a legal order to limit the time on which the people spend time.
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is be 85
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
there is no doubt that in the contemporary er...
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Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
...ng party. As we can see, the events are consist of various kind from political news to ...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ore than 80 percent of people following all of the events all around the world suffer from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, may, so, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5985915493 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53550359121 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525821596244 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8424753185 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.833333333 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114486173588 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363855375835 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429593826152 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734269799832 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601591723498 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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