Electronic devices play a more and more important role in our lives, while there is a view that the increasingly using of this category of equipment makes people have the lower ability of face-to-face communication. And I completely agree with this idea.
Electronic devices like phones and computers facilitate our lives intensively. Firstly, there is no need to go to a shop centre, which is tired and a waste f time, under the helping of the internet. With a click of the mouse, we can complete shopping stuffs and just wait goods we buy transformed to our home. Secondly, because of the full use of communication technology in the working area, telecommute is possible for the employers living in a crowded and busy city. They can contact with their colleagues and the boss and discuss working affairs online. Finally, it is easy for everyone to have access to numerous educational resources by using computers or cellphones, which makes people have the idea that communicating with teachers for unclear questions is unnecessary any more.
However, it is the convenience that electronic devices offer that is mining our face-to-face communicating ability, for the reason that many people tend to rely on them and do not care about the real world. Telecommuting and online shopping indeed save our time, but they also reduce our chance to have contact with others. Moreover, because of the colourful resources online, many teenagers and children are addicted to the virtual world and do not attend outdoor activities, which are proven to be their golden chances to develop social skills.
In conclusion, because introducing electronic devices makes our life far more convenient, there are an increasing number of people who are liable to rely on them, which finally make these people lose face-to-face contacting skills.
- Some people think that teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subjects they are best at or they are most interested in. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 61
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- Developing countries require help offered by international organizations to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aid is important. Others believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both these v 84
- Some people say government should give the health care the first priorities , some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the tax payers' money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 84
- In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. 67
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21212121212 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93260001408 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585858585859 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4662763057 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247147214297 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839200792788 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075276753935 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169448327659 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535918104223 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.