Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that children should be motivated to be competitive, while others feel that cooperation is a more important value to establish in the young. I believe that while competition can help children to evaluate their strengths and weaknesses, cooperation is more important because it teaches them to work within a team, a crucial skill for them to possess as they enter adulthood.
Competitiveness in children often reveals their strengths and weaknesses and helps them to evaluate themselves. When children compete with others, they are able to compare their strengths and weaknesses which help them to evaluate themselves and learn from it. For example, a recent survey by The Sunday Times found that almost 80% of the children who were competing in the Olympics Junior category and failed to make it to the final round were aware about their weaknesses. However, having a competitive attitude is useful for attaining only short term goals.
On the other hand, cooperation teaches children to work within a group. This is because most work requires more than a person to successfully complete it and also that it can be done easily in less time than it would require for a single person to complete it. This is why learning this skill would help children to be prepared for future and become more useful to society. As an example, recent research by Brown University revealed that most successful managers were involved in at least one group activity when they were students.
To conclude, while having a sense of competition in children can reveal their strengths and weaknesses, learning how to cooperate prepares them to work within a group and so, it is more important to learn it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, while, at least, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03180212014 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72848270338 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505300353357 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2960939663 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.454545455 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7272727273 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227625142421 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100379331073 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546075506042 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148636443341 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332978953747 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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