The argument posits that in order to decrease road accident, Prunty County should undertake various road quality improvement projects similar to Butler County accomplished five years ago. However argument makes certain implict assumptions, correctness of which must be evaluated for proposed argument to be viable.
Butler County achieved 25 percent less accident last year than five years ago, but what were the accident statistics in past two,three and four years? Does every successive year obsevered decrease in accidents? It might be the case last year accident were less than 5 year ago but more than the accidents occured in its previous year. Thus it must corroborate the decrease mentioned with all last five years report and not just last 5th year. Even if the reports suggests continuous decrease, one cannot certain that same will be true at Prunty County. People in various state differs-Prunty County people might be rough drivers, always rushing to thier work contrast to Butler County people with more cautious driving.
The improvements like lane widening, road resurfacing might impetus drivers to overspeed since roads are better and wider, increasing chances of accidents than before. One cannot guarantee the decrease in accidents based on road quality improvements,the condition of car must also be maintained. If Prounty County people ignorant with car maintenance, there are high chances of brakes failures and other car mechanism anomaly leading to egregious ramifications.
Bulter County people might suffered financial crisis within last 2 years and are forced to sell thier vehicles, leading to decreased number of vehicle and thus less accidents. In this case road improvement will not contribute to decreased road accidents. The arguments provided decrease in percent- might be the case there are more accidents in Bulter county than Prunty County.
In conclusion argument must endorse this assumptions with valid evidence for the efficacy of stated road improvemnt to be viable in Prunty County regradless of Butler County.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 320 350
No. of Characters: 1706 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.229 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.331 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.546 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ler County accomplished five years ago. However argument makes certain implict assumpti...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , three
...were the accident statistics in past two,three and four years? Does every successive y...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...accidents occured in its previous year. Thus it must corroborate the decrease mentio...
^^^^
Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...dents based on road quality improvements,the condition of car must also be maintaine...
^^^^
Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun accidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...to decreased number of vehicle and thus less accidents. In this case road improvemen...
^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... In conclusion argument must endorse this assumptions with valid evidence for the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71073742465 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537735849057 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3730058636 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13333333333 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200927318654 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792992917071 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422939672398 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113212831428 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493900574347 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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