Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
here the author compared two realtors by their agents number and his personal experinece with them and based on that he suggested his friend to go with the Adams Relaty. This conclusion can be judged as flawed on multiple account. One cant judge a realtor company only by its number of agents and the revenue it generated, Their is also the factor of which market segmant they are targeting not all the buyers has the same requirement. Here the author first compared the number of real estate agents where the Adams realty has more realtor that fitch realty. He also emphasised on the issue that many of the agents of the Fitch realty is part time job holder. This doesnt automatically disqualify the FItch realty as a inferior firm. It might their business strategy to minimize cost by employing part time yet more effective and efficient agent to save more cost. This might be their operating policy to make profit.
To make his judgement, the author also use the revenue to compare the two firms. But revenue doesnt always tell you the full story. One company might be earning more revenue but their cost might be hogher which shaves off the profit. In this cas, where the number of employee is higher for Adams Realty their revenue is not that much higher the fitch. Also the Fith Realty has lesser staff with more part timer, which will result in less operating cost which in turn will result in higher profit margin. If this is the case than the Fitch Realty is the clear winner here. But the question is whether which company makes more money should be the selection criteria. Just because one company making big bucks doesnt automatically tranlates success in realtor's sector. One might have few big client thus earn big commission, on the other hand one might making money by larger quantity of clients.
Also the author used his past experience with them to come to a conclusion, where less time was taken with the Adams Realty. But this might not reflect the true scenario as the location and type of the house he was selling was not mentioned in the passage. The area ehre the house is situated and the type of house might be of a very important factor. A beach house might sell more pro,ptly with good price whereas a house in the suburban are might not sell that fast. again a duplex might more appealing to certain type of buyer whereas the a sigle storied building might not. This factor could affected the four month long period with Fitch Realty where the location or the type of the house resulted in longer period to match up a buyer as well as for the promtness of the second seel of the buyer with Adams Realty. But this doesnt necessarily reflects the true evaluation of the writer.
thus from the assumptions made by the author, one can agree that while it sounds very appealing and cogent, there are some serious issue with the assumptions behind the authors reasoning. To choose a Real estate firm one should not rely on the number of agents and revenue only. although a peer's review is of some major impact, one should also consider what type of house one is selling, where the house is located and the margin of profit and commission he is considering. By judging these criteria one should choose the the firm which best caters to the need of his own.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 586 350
No. of Characters: 2655 1500
No. of Different Words: 260 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.92 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.531 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.136 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.308 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.654 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.435 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
here the author compared two realtors by the...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...dged as flawed on multiple account. One cant judge a realtor company only by its num...
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Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
...of agents and the revenue it generated, Their is also the factor of which market segm...
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Line 1, column 639, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
...ny of the agents of the Fitch realty is part time job holder. This doesnt automatically d...
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Line 1, column 666, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: doesn't
...ch realty is part time job holder. This doesnt automatically disqualify the FItch real...
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...atically disqualify the FItch realty as a inferior firm. It might their business ...
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Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion: Also,
...enue is not that much higher the fitch. Also the Fith Realty has lesser staff with m...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rn will result in higher profit margin. If this is the case than the Fitch Realty ...
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...st because one company making big bucks doesnt automatically tranlates success in real...
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Suggestion: Also,
...money by larger quantity of clients. Also the author used his past experience wit...
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Suggestion: affect
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Suggestion: the; the
...udging these criteria one should choose the the firm which best caters to the need of h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, well, whereas, while, as for, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2704.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62222222222 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20341548805 2.78398813304 79% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437606837607 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7481719603 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5714285714 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8928571429 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53571428571 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.20758483034 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179796750445 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581819434925 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782032672618 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114266054823 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652586460717 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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