An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author states that an international development organization working for response to deficiency of vitamin A among the people of a poor country named tagus. Here author states that the organization has got new breed of the millet and which is costly and will cure the deficiency of the vitamin A. author argument is not convincing because of the lack of the evidences that the author has produced.
Firstly the author has manifested that country tagus is poor country and residents are having deficiency of the vitamin A. Author has not shown any survey or idea showing that what percent of people are being affected or what area of people of tagus are showing deficiency. And how the author came to know about the deficiency of the vitamin.
Secondly if the country is poor then developing new breed of seeds which is more in cost, how can it be supported. Though giving subsidies to the farmers for growing new crop can help farmers and motivate people to develop it.But this doesn't ensure that residents will get it the same low prices as traders or businessman can increase the cost and sell it resulting in that people will not get the millet with vitamin A. Giving subsidies to the people of the country directly in buying might be helpful in solving the problem.
Though the millet is the staple food for people of the tagus, they might be adopted to the specific type of millet which is available to them nearby and which is their pocket friendly. This doesn't ensure that they will get accustomed to any breed of the millet.No evidence is presented in the argument showing that there has been any kind of such transformation before.
Author states that government should do any kind of help necessary to fight with deficiency of the vitamin A and promoting this new breed of the millet. Author is not discussing any kind of the measures that government has actively taken to combat with such a situation in the country and has not shown any other strategy for combating the situation in which the plan of the new breed fails to succeed.
Because of the above reasons and lack of compelling evidence regarding the deficiency of the vitamin A in the people of the tagus, author argument is unconvincing.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1807 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.633 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.506 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.704 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.482 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.769 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.19 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...rmers and motivate people to develop it.But this doesnt ensure that residents will ...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... motivate people to develop it.But this doesnt ensure that residents will get it the s...
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Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...nd which is their pocket friendly. This doesnt ensure that they will get accustomed to...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: No
...t accustomed to any breed of the millet.No evidence is presented in the argument s...
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Line 9, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...before. Author states that government should do any kind of help necessary to ...
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Line 11, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ew breed fails to succeed. Because of the above reasons and lack of compellin...
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Line 11, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed. Because of the above reasons and lack of compelling evidence regarding th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77461139896 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54866590025 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.401554404145 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3030955588 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.642857143 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401379599391 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148583412987 0.0743258471296 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900648884718 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205356347874 0.128457276422 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729015611947 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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