Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Throughout history, the world has changed a lot. These changes have a direct impact on individuals' lives. This matter that whether these changes make people happy or not is a controversial issue between persons. Some people think that world changes have a significant effect on people's lives and make them more satisfied, however, others disagree with this idea. I personally concur with the last belief. I feel this way for two main reasons, that I will explain in the following essay.
The first noteworthy point regarding this issue is that today, there are many entertainments that people can use in their free time. These entertainments help persons to be happier and release their stress. For example, when I was a child, I could only spend time watching cartoons. There were not enough toys to entertain me. I was always nagging and I was unsatisfied. These days, children can go to parks that are equipped with advanced facilities or play with many toys. Totally, there are many ways to be happy.
Second, with the development of technology over time, many devices have been created to facilitate life. People are more convenient than people who lived in the past time. Because many jobs are done by electronic devices, people have much free time. Hence, there are more happiness and satisfaction in society. For instance, people in the past had to spend a lot of time to go shopping. These days, with the advent of the internet and electronic shops, people can make their purchase only by searching on the internet. Internet helps people to save their energy and time, hence, people have more free time for relaxing and enjoying.
All in all, by considering the mentioned reasons above, I think that individuals have more fun and are more satisfied due to quick changes in the world. This is because of the fact that changing the world with high speed have created more entertainments, and life is facilitated by new devices.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...convenient than people who lived in the past time. Because many jobs are done by electron...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
... to quick changes in the world. This is because of the fact that changing the world with high speed have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91463414634 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59927803091 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530487804878 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3013102238 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.2727272727 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9090909091 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288297004609 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838658270271 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656355015672 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170794961264 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621904249899 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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