The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Submitted by Sunnydeol on Tue, 07/16/2019 - 05:35

The given vertical bar graph and line graph illustrate the information about the number of Japanese visitors commuting abroad and also the share of Australia in the Japanese market from year 1985 to 1995 respectively.

It can be clearly seen that in 1985, number of visitors travelling abroad was 5 million. In next 5 years tourists increased to double of it to reach at approximately 11 million visitors in year 1990. However, in 1991, visitors showed slight decline in the numbers with near about 10 million visitors. After that it showed gradual increase in next 4 years to reach at the highest number of visits outside Japan with 15 million in 1995.

Moving further, in 1985, Australia's share of Japan's tourist market stood at 2 percent. Furthermore, it showed gradual increase in next 3 years with 2 and a half percent increase. However, in between 1988 and 1989 it decreased slightly by 1%. Afterwards, it steadily increased from year 1989 to 1993 and reached at its highest with more that 6% of market share. Although, in 1994 it fell slighlty to stay at 6% of Australia's share.

Overall, it is noticeable that travelling abroad among Japanese people showed growth every year which resulted in significant rise in the Australia share in the Japanese tourist market.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rs with near about 10 million visitors. After that it showed gradual increase in next...
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hest with more that 6% of market share. Although, in 1994 it fell slighlty to stay at 6%...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1069.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97209302326 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6729824253 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6814337388 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1818181818 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278851537007 0.215688989381 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11147431772 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900891791054 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202503524531 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755002317206 0.0819641961636 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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