In today's world, extending the retirement age has been an ongoing controversial topic for decades. Though, thankful to the medical advancements and research people live longer today, but, just as the saying "Old age will not come alone" it doesn't. It brings with it a lot of problems to cope up and hence, I completely disagree with people staying longer in the workforce.
First of all, as said, old age brings with itself other co-morbid conditions which are inevitable. Medical science has made living easier and longer with these diseases but not to delay them. Conditions like Alzheimer's, Parkinsons, Obesity, Hypertension, Insomnia, are prevalent in many elderly that could hamper work. It can make the system more slobby and slagged. On the other hand, the young are blessed with the passion, enthusiasm and the untiring urge to establish themselves and hence, the tasks and targets are easily achieved. Since the old has already accomplished, it is difficult to get that vigour in them.
Secondly, longer the people stay in the position, the fewer seats will be available for the newer to fill in. Companies need young and freshers to come up with innovative ideas and strategies. For instance, current Apple Inc. CEO, Mr Tim cook came up with the idea of changing the buttons and features of ipod to a different style as compared to the one designed by Mr Late Steve Jobs. The sales reached heights because it was more convenient than before.
To sum up, Although People who would stay longer would know more about the company, have more experience and could be more trustful, it does not surpass the demerits. Hence I concur that they should not stay in workforce longer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59569860725 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630281690141 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.75 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.75 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225113002252 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670013430592 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889755697844 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140763294955 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847246070601 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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