If people want to contribute to society, which of the following is the best way?
1. Riding a bicycle or walking on foot
2. Recycling the waste
3. Buy local organic food
The world has been changed during these years and most people start protecting that through various campaigns and social contribution. Some people think that recycling the waste or buying local food are the best ways of contributing to the society that has numerous and valuable advantages, on the other extreme of the rope, the overwhelming majority of people believe that riding a bicycle or walking on foot are the most effective ways. While two groups take their positions, personally speaking, I deeply believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, bicycles use no fuel; therefore, not only will air pollution be reduced, but also respiratory diseases will be reduced surprisingly. To be more specific, nowadays, the main cause of many diseases is related to air pollution so much so that various social organizations put a lot of effort to encourage people to use green fuels such as electric energy and contribute to society by riding a bicycle to reduce pollutions and protect the environment. For instance, two years ago the president of the Netherlands enacted effective and reasonable rules, developed long-term strategies, and organized various social groups to regulate behaviors of people and encourage them to ride a bicycle or walking on foot. His government built different cities with no car and forbade using fuels in these cities didn’t allow anyone to drive a car. After four years, the health organization of Netherland declared that the rate of respiratory diseases has been reduced astonishingly because of high people contribution to riding bicycles and walking on foot.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is riding a bicycle or walking on foot help people be healthy mentally. In other words, riding a bicycle gets ways people from the noisy situation and terrific traffic in streets which helps people to improve their performance at work. For example, empirical research conducted by some master students and experienced experts at a university shows that engineers riding a bicycle or walking on foot have higher performance about their tasks in various factories. Actually, riding bicycles and not being in traffic can help them get-ride of their negative energy and alleviate their stress. Hence, they can concentrate on their tasks and duties properly and efficiently without any stress and anxieties; subsequently, they can fulfill their projects perfectly.
In conclusion, people contribution to riding a bicycle or walking on foot will remove pollution and eradicate some respiratory diseases from societies. Moreover, these campaigns will give rise to the improvement of people’s performance and social productivity.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well 73
- TPO3Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. 76
- If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? 73
- For the successful development of the country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of every young children five to ten years old than to spend money on universities 93
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37612612613 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90488070547 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529279279279 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4302765832 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.1875 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289456056642 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955509725946 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905409885745 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174803440467 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362341134262 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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