TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.

Submitted by ashkar on Wed, 08/07/2019 - 20:57

Life can go very hard without the companionship of friends. It is approved that being lonely is more dangerous to one's health than smoking. While being social beings, not all people have the same level of ability to make new friends. There are even different attitudes in people towards social life. Some make new friends once in a blue moon, but ones that are there for life, while others might not dive that deep into the relationship with every one and prefer knowing a lot of people, even shallowly. For many reasons including personal ones, I am inclined to believe that having quite a few real and close friends kindles more joy in life. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.

First of all, I think we all have experienced feeling lonely, while surrounded by people. I believe that in the matter of friendship, quality ways much more than quantity. Meeting with a lot of people who won’t deeply understand you, is not as satisfying as having a few friends that you can share your whole true self with. Speaking of my own experience, I am in a group of friends that has lasted for over five eight years. We have laughed, cried, and actually grown up together. We were together in high-school, and then we became separated entering the college, while staying in touch as much as possible. We all have found new friends and are close to them too, but we have all admitted that there is no other place warmer and more friendlier than our very own group.

Secondly, I think the time factor is really important in developing trust in a relationship. One can never be confident to know other people’s thoughts, but as two people spend much more time together, it becomes impossible for them to have secrets from each other or hide anything. Given the right amount of time, every little pet-peeve is to be enclosed. This works both ways, and you can be much more comfortably yourself, in front of an old friend, since they know inside and out. There is not going to be any hiding, and its quite liberating.

To wrap it up, I do strongly believe that maintaining friendship with smaller number of people brings about more happiness than finding new ones often, due to my own experience of such small and long lasting group and the acceptance and the closeness it contains, and the fact that time plays an important role in developing trust in a relationship, and well who is a friend who can not be trusted.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... that being lonely is more dangerous to ones health than smoking. While being social...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gether. We were together in high-school, and then we became separated entering th...
^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e staying in touch as much as possible. We all have found new friends and are clos...
^^
Line 3, column 739, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'friendlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: friendlier
...that there is no other place warmer and more friendlier than our very own group. Secondly, I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, i think, speaking of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66203703704 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56409185559 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550925925926 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3258527273 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.7 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252192655712 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647045053149 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568183436049 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154281216054 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450854672016 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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