The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee - a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
The director states that many other companies have recently improved their productivity by having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. But the director fails to provide sufficent information on what sort of companies they were. The companies, who have increased their productivity, might have the products different than that of Acme Publishing Company. If the companies who have increased their productivity and Acme Publishing Company have different products, compelling all the employee of Acme Publishing Company may not be fruitful.
Similarly, the director's claim: One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours, may not be just because of the Reading Course. The graduate may have been good in reading before getting enrolled in the course. The director has not mentioned the initial reading speed of the graduate, which makes the before and after comparision difficult. And was the perfomance the same for all the graduates? Were all graduates able to read with same speed? Or, Was the reading speed of all the graduates improved? Without all these questions answered, it is impossible to predict the improvement in the productivity of Acme Publishing Company too.
Furthermore, the director says that another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. But, was the reading speed the mere factor for the promotion. The graduate might had good skills and appraisal to get promotion. The gradudate may have good commanding and leading skills due to which he got rose to Vice precident.
The argument did sound with strong premises. However, it lacked the neccessary data to strenghten that premise. For instance, if the director was able to provude further explanation on what sort of the other companies are or he was able to ensure the reading capacity of all the graduates were enhanced, it would have been garuntee the improvement of Acme Publishing Company by requiring all of their employees to take the Easy Read course. In last, in absence of these ,the argument remains flawed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.074 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.761 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.107 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...vity, might have the products different than that of Acme Publishing Company. If the...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...which he got rose to Vice precident. The argument did sound with strong premises...
^^^
Line 7, column 470, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ead course. In last, in absence of these ,the argument remains flawed.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, for instance, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21470588235 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83712870839 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476470588235 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.5964819847 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8947368421 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462322060191 0.218282227539 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136426108622 0.0743258471296 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153421893142 0.0701772020484 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282268438795 0.128457276422 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158343230637 0.0628817314937 252% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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