The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The issue of whether being accustomed to luxaries and conveniences of contemporary life prevents an individual from becoming independent is a controversial one. As each side has its strength and weaknesses, I do believe that indulgence in luxaries somewhat hinders in ones development and prespective towards life.
Firstly, I would start off with an epigram that, "You start valuing things only when you lack it". For example, say, if someone has got all the luxaries without any putting in any effort, then he is most likely not to value it as much, since he is been getting it easily. You might spend on un-necessary things extravagently, whereas you could have rather used it for something productive say like taking up some courses that interest you, or pursuing your hobby like playing an instrument or anything that you just love doing and eventually, it that would have also benefited you in developing yourself.
Secondly, "Time" is considered to be very precious and undoubtely, it is the pith of becoming successful in life. Your personality and prespective changes drastically when you start valuing time. Struggles teaches you so much in life which changes one's parochial view towards life. Just a basic example which asserts this fact regarding struggles is, when as a child or when you are in your teen years under your parents shelter, you most likely get everything that you want and hence there is no need to worry about anything, but when you go out and face the real world, things are not that smooth and easy going. When you go and live independtly, when you need to earn by doing maybe say odd jobs or maybe repay your college debt, thats when you understand the true meaning of struggle which completely changes your view.
Some might argue that, the one's who have resources and luxary will surely develop their overall personality. As the coin has two faces, undoubtely there are exceptions who will develop their skills, but the number of things to hobble them is far larger than the one who is easy to put up in any situation.
In conclusion, having luxaries and conveniences does affect the development of an individual in some or the other way, and hence the ones with luxaries should definately respect and value the advantages they have and should make most out of it which will help them in their development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ulgence in luxaries somewhat hinders in ones development and prespective towards lif...
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Line 5, column 744, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... jobs or maybe repay your college debt, thats when you understand the true meaning of...
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Line 9, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch will help them in their development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73085448556 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.1787334877 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.846153846 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6923076923 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242160782101 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898252172177 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599385031987 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117426841471 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624904163482 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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