Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
Traveling during vacation is one my most favourite hobby. It helps to reset my mind after a hectic period of job life. But the first question I have to answer before planning my trip is where to go. As I am from a country with abundant natural beatuies, to be truthful, I hardly ever thought of going abroad to travel with the purpose of watching their natural beauties. To my preferences, traveling own country can bring more benefit over traveling to foreign countries and this is for several reasons.
When someone travels his own countriy, he gets the exposure to a variety of cultures of the country. It helps a person to understand the culture of the region and appreciate these national treasures more. In addition, origin of many folk stories can be understood better. This experience is very unique and can lead a person to love the culture of his country more. From my personal experience, I had traveled to a district of our country which was famous for a particular monarchy. The relics of the past, the stories and the legends of that place was very compelling to me. The origin of a famous love story of "Behula and Lakkhindar" was better understood by me after watching the landscape there. I started to appreciate my culture more. Another place where I traveled and loved was Sylhet, known for many religious preachers. Visiting that place was a life changing experience, watching people being humbled by spirituality. These are very compelling reasons for my preference.
Furthermore, by traveling own country, exploring the beauties of the country can provide a person with motivation to work for the country. For example. Our country has the longest sea beach in the world, Cox's Bazar sea beach. Watching its beauty and knowing its worth motivated the local people there to preserve its naturality and also influnced the visitorsto aid the in the preservation of the beach. Another benefit that can rise from traveling own country is the better understanding of the countries political situation. In my experinece, the places where I have travelled, I have seen people to be more content where the elected officials are from the ruling party. This scenario gave me a better understading of how the administration of my country works. It helped me to relate with people's sufferings and joys. This is another compelling reason why I prefer people traveling their own country.
In conclusion, traveling a foreign country can be a very Nice experience and benefit in some ways, but due to the stated reasons above and from my personal experience I think it is more beneficial for people to travel their own country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'unique'.
Suggestion: unique
...e understood better. This experience is very unique and can lead a person to love the cultu...
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Line 7, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for people to travel their own country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94170403587 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82635035857 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468609865471 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1912889364 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.16 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.84 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340335899199 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094392655196 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103277944603 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261172918078 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801927170919 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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