TPO 28 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Today's parents are more sophisticated, knowledgeable and accomplished which assist children to strengthen their educations. Today's parents have excelling realization and desirable association with their children. I strongly agree that today’s parents are more involved in their children's education rather than parents in the past.

First of all, today's improving technologies, sciences, and society causes parents to be more literate and it causes to have superior knowledge and exposure about the children's issues. Literate parents could spend most of time with their children and get suggestion for them. Literate parents could help their children, which courses they need to take to become better and could help them which school or university is more effectual. Parents could be effective in selecting university field and in examining their aptitude and curiosity which are significant factors in being prosperous in educational life. My own experience is a good example of this. I have literate parents; they have high knowledge about everything because they study a lot. I could say my parents are one of my influential incentives in my success because of their maintenance, encouragement, their knowledge, advice and their effort for me. They always consume time helping me with my lesson, helped me to choose my filed in university and helping to have superior grades and to find an admirable job. Not only parents are competent teachers, but also they are north worthy guidance too.

Secondly, parents are the best friends for children which this friendship causes to realize their children better. If you look closer to families, you will see that children have a hearty relationship with their parents, even mother or father. Children spend most of their time with their parents, since this causes them to realize each other better. Friendship between parents and children causes parents to have high apprehension about their children's necessity. Children could easily say their problems, their needs, and requests about everything even their educations. For instance, I have a friendly relationship with my father because he is so kind and intelligent person. From high school, I had lots of problems with my lessons. When I said to my father, he spent lots of his time to teach me; even I could remember he took a tutor for me to solve my problems. To sum up, parents are ebullient persons with surpassing perception for children.

In conclusion, today’s parents are more educated and they can realize their children better than parents in the best. Not only parents can help their children, but also they can encourage them better. Parents can establish a better relationship which has a great result in their study and success.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Independent TOEFL Writing
Essays by the user:
>>> more essays by the user >>>

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'realizing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: realizing
...r children which this friendship causes to realize their children better. If you look clos...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...of their time with their parents, since this causes them to realize each other bette...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2328.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30296127563 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79595288693 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464692482916 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8518441645 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2916666667 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300293216583 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121675981466 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10644379973 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25263685273 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106351225304 0.0645574589148 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.