Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks.
Is this a positive or negative development?
In today’s world, some schools sell dishes such as sugary drinks or fast food to students during their breaks. In my opinion, it is a negative development for the pupils since these products are excessively unhealthy and schoolchildren are at risk of getting accustomed to eating junk food regularly instead of healthy food.
Junk food and pop drinks are deeply detrimental for students’ flourishment. This is because this type of items does not provide sufficient vitamins, minerals and substances which are vital for them to flourish vigorously. Apart from that, when they consume these types of products, they gain weight, suffer from high blood pressure and risk themselves to have a heart attack in their maturity since the level of sugar in the blood rises and decreases rapidly when individuals consume them. These health problems prevent these young adults to be raised in a healthy way.
Apart from the risks of these foods, offering these items hamper the lifestyle of students. If they realize the taste of hamburgers or coke, they will avoid eating fresh produce which is substantially necessary for them because of its ingredients such as vitamin C or Omega 3. Therefore, once the school management offers unhealthy food, the habits of students will be affected negatively because they will not wish to eat the required intakes such as vegetables or fruits. Consequently, the demand of students towards everyday produce or natural nutrition will vanish as these young adults will prefer junk food more frequently.
To sum up, educational institutions should not aim to profit from selling unhealthy food and drinks due to their adverse effects. Overall, these products prevent these kids to be raised healthily and impede their habits undesirably.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...prevent these young adults to be raised in a healthy way. Apart from the risks of these foo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, therefore, apart from, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32155477032 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75545428419 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590106007067 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4289129988 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207034247337 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832460373192 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930586513792 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14407579551 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981048296933 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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