Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they
like to do—rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people say that people rarely have time to focus on anything else these days because they are very busy with their life. From their viewpoint, in today’s world, with the pressure from jobs, to support families or to do the right things people less time to get off-tracked. However, I strongly agree with the statement and believe that people spend much time on doing other things and not the things that they should be doing. I support my position with the following reasons.
First, with the advent and availability of modern communication technology such as computers, tablets or smartphones, people are found spending more time on those devices. They might be watching some movie or TV series or could be surfing through social media. For example, when I was in my last semester, I had a lot of unfinished thesis work and needed to be done with it as soon as possible. But then I got hooked to a TV series called “Person of Interest”. I forgot my thesis and started binge-watching the series. It took a toll because I had to suffer from pressing time issues and went through a lot of stress to complete the job. If these technologies, people would not have the chance to get distracted like this. In that case, they would have performed their tasks timely. So, this just illustrates that these technologies give us opportunities to get deviated from what we should do.
Second, too much stress due to any reason can make the mind look for easy escape. In present world, almost everything causes stress whether it is someone’s job or overwhelming pressure from colleges or even family crisis. People think that they need to escape the real world for a bit and indulge in some make-belief fantasy. This might sometimes turn into an addiction. For instance, one of my friends has a highly stressful job and he is always getting scolded by his boss. To him, he needs the entertainment just to keep his mind calm so that he does not let the work stuff bother his performance. But once he starts, he cannot stop easily. If no one had stress in their life, they would not need this kind of escapes. In that scenario, the chances of getting addicted would also be gone and people could not concentrate on their lives and they would do what only needs to be done. So, it seems that people might need the enjoyment to mitigate their stresses but end up doing it more than often.
To sum up, the issue is complex in the sense that both sides of the argument can make compelling cases. However, it is more likely to be true that people spend more time enjoying themselves rather than their necessaries. The available technologies and the other factors that lead people to feel pressurized have much contribution to this phenomenon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, then, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75675675676 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65385897962 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532224532225 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5009726708 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256594562323 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658273685392 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918175673961 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17146102332 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117507866782 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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