Some people say the amount of time watching TV affects children’s behavior the most while others say that what they watch matters more. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, children are watching tv rather than studing. few inhabitants think watching television for a long time leads to change in children's behaviour whereas others say that it depends on the content. In my opinion, behaviour affects when they watch adult content programmes.

On the one hand, some people, Because infants watching television for a long period. They are influencing by characters in a movie or a cartoon channel. Although small aged group are being directed, they see the adult content and do what character did in the movie. If kids are looking or acting in an another way, it is the symptom of a change. In addition, when they spend more time on tv, it will cause health problems. Even if infants go to doctor, problems will continue. The health problems like eye sight and head ache. These problems were commonly effected to long time tv watchers. For instance, In 2010, A child, who is nine year old, effected with eyesight and In a survey declared that more than 80% of children were suffering by this problem. Hence duration of watching tv leads to many problems

On the other hand, others, based on televion programmes, which contain adult content, many infants are behaving in a different manner. If kids watch restricted content, they definitely inspire and try to do that. Infants can watch tv as they wish but they should'nt watch the 18+ movies. For example, In a survey of deccan chronicle, which is a news paper, gave date of children, who are watching adult content were experiencing drastic changes in their activites. Therefore parents have to take care of children what they watch on television

To conclude, I believe that kids actions will change what they watch on tv. Some think that watching for a long period cause health problems and infants were influenced by characters. In contrast, others say that the content olays a vital role on their actions

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Few
...en are watching tv rather than studing. few inhabitants think watching television f...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a way' or 'another way'.
Suggestion: a way; another way
...movie. If kids are looking or acting in an another way, it is the symptom of a change. In addi...
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...will continue. The health problems like eye sight and head ache. These problems were comm...
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Line 3, column 757, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...hildren were suffering by this problem. Hence duration of watching tv leads to many p...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...dult content, many infants are behaving in a different manner. If kids watch restricted content, they...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ants can watch tv as they wish but they shouldnt watch the 18+ movies. For example, In a...
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Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
... survey of deccan chronicle, which is a news paper, gave date of children, who are watchin...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ing drastic changes in their activites. Therefore parents have to take care of children w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9099378882 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55363551774 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534161490683 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8661398706 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2105263158 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9473684211 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284697489431 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935273132949 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669400366929 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205121442705 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475344308305 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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