The table presents the subways systems in 6 major countries in terms of opening date, length of route, and passenger per annum in millions.(re-write)
The table presents the subways systems in 6 major countries in terms of opening date, length of route, and passenger per annum in millions.
Overall, all the mentioned features varied notably, while Kyoto's system accounted for the shortest route and lowest passengers in the statistic year, the oldest system in London showed the longest route.
London subway system coming first construction in 1863 revealed the length of 394 km and carried 775 passengers. By comparison with Los Angeles' railway being inaugurated in 2001, lengthening 11 km and delivered 50 passengers in their route, such system nearly sixteen-fold increase in full load of passengers. Coming second constructed in 1900, subterranean in Paris delivered 1191 passenger. There was a slight number in comparison with Tokyo's system gaining 1927 commuter involve in their system.
A closer looked at the a-hundredth kilometers length under the longest route. Built in 1927, Tokyo's subterranean depicted the length of 155 km, a 30 km longer than that of Washington DC railways which constructed around 50 years following. Standing in contrast with the two former mentioned, railway system in Paris, having 199 km length, showed a slight higher and noted as the second longest route of the overall systems.
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By comparison with Los Angeles' railway being inaugurated in 2001, lengthening 11 km and delivered 50 passengers in their route, such system nearly sixteen-fold increase in full load of passengers.
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delivered 1191 passenger
delivered 1191 passengers
There was a slight number in comparison with Tokyo's system gaining 1927 commuter involve in their system.
There was a slight number in comparison with Tokyo's system gaining 1927 commuters who involve in the system.
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