Undoubtedly, societies have to rely on various norms and laws to be stable and prevent disorder. Although the abundance of such regulations sometimes raises the question: are some of these laws are restrictive? especially for the young generation? While some people hold the mentioned view, others believe that these laws are not strict and, in fact, they are necessary for the wellbeing of both the young and society. Personally, I am in accord with the latter and the following are the reasons to substantiate my view.
To begin with, some rules that are mandated by society are directly related to both the youth's physical and mental health, so while they might be interpreted as strict from a young mind’s perspective, they are justifiable. For instance, regulations issued regarding the prohibition of selling alcoholic beverages and cigarettes to young individuals below the legal age are essential to keep them from endangering their health by consuming such products.
Moreover, there are other laws concerning the mandatory education of youth, which might be considered strict but they are needed to maintain an educated society and guarantee its future prosperity. The defiance nature of youths certainly is in contrast with rules that dictate what they have to do, and it obliterates their minds to perceive the essence of these regulations which ultimately benefit both their own and their society’s interests. For instance, when I was a kid, I hated the fact that I had to go to school every day, which I did not like at all. I thought that going to school deprives me of playing with my friends and being with my beloved family. Growing to a young educated man, I am now grateful that at first I was compelled to continue my education. Having done so, granted me a fair social and financial status since now I am a successful engineer contributing to many prominent projects in my hometown.
To sum up, I believe that the rules society expects juveniles to obey are not strict. This is because not only these laws guarantee their mental and physical welfare, but also it makes them developing a successful character in the future benefitting themselves and their societies.
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- TOEFL T P O 43 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Especially
...are some of these laws are restrictive? especially for the young generation? While some pe...
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Line 4, column 32, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'rules'' or 'rule's'?
Suggestion: rules'; rule's
...etown. To sum up, I believe that the rules society expects juveniles to obey are n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, in contrast, in fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0467032967 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85966050318 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552197802198 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2825877028 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.466666667 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2666666667 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149435643237 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544972597888 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564563408448 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935527979057 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178861080421 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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