Cambridge IELTS book 11 test 4 task 1

The table below shows the amount of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the years after and before it was modernized. After the table there is the charts that show the result of surveys asking people how satisfied they were with their visit to museum, during the same two periods.

It is obviously that the numbers of visitors significantly increased after the refurbishment from 74,000 before the reconstruction to 92,000 after it had been done. Now lets look at the charts. The year before refurbishment shows a negative pattern: the results of survey illustrate that only 15% of visitors were very satisfied and the number of dissatisfied visitors declined and become 15%, on a contrary, people who were very satisfied increased to 35%. Comparing the amount of satisfied visitors we can also see an upward trend (it increased from 30% to 40% after the refurbishment).

To sum it up, we can say that all work that has been done to attract new visitors to Ashdown Museum has reached its aim.

Votes
Average: 3.4 (3 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are the charts'?
Suggestion: there are the charts
...fore it was modernized. After the table there is the charts that show the result of surveys asking ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 826.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68274806648 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5992782439 43.030603864 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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