The provided pie charts illustrate the data about highest level of education of female over the period of 5 decades starting from 1945 to 1995 in Somel and.
It can be clearly seen that,women did not go to school and finish their primary education were predominant in 1945.However, in 1995,female who graduated from secondary school accounted for the highest proportion of the whole period.
As is presented in the pie charts,more than one-third of women never attended to school and completed their primary programs in 1945.Of approximately 30% left in 1945,merely 1 out of 100 women received their first Degree while no one earned the post graduation qualifications.Just above a quarter of women finished sixth and ninth grade and less than 4% made it to their 12th grade.
After 50 years,there was a drastical improvement.Every women in 1995 went to school and at least graduated from secondary school.Moreover,the number of women awarded with first-Degree certificates ruled the whole period with over 50%.Post graduates witnessed the percentege of 20% for the first time in 1995
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, so, third, while, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 913.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 174.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24712643678 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2827765301 2.65546596893 124% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649425287356 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.4926829268 191% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.6356160254 43.030603864 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 228.25 112.824112599 202% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.5 22.9334400587 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.0 5.23603664747 306% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 1.69756097561 1001% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248011393939 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165218687483 0.103423049105 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854294337054 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165218687483 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854294337054 0.0819641961636 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.0 13.2329268293 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.29 61.2550243902 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 10.3012195122 183% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.06 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.06136585366 123% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.9970731707 175% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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