Technology is getting better and better every single day. In fact, It has made our lives not only advanced but easier, particularly in the world of transportation. Even-though, some people may think that urbanization has gone so far to the point where it will be no cars in twenty years from now. Personally, I don't agree with fact that people will no longer use cars in two decades from now for two reasons.
First, not all communities are living a fancy and modern lives. In fact, a lot of population are still living in poverty and suffer to get something to eat or drink. For example, few days ago I read an article about the communities in Africa and south Asia. The article talks about how do these communities live their lives without running water. Every day they would walk for hundreds of miles to reach any water resource they can come across to wash their clothes, take a bath and fill out gallons of water to take it back home. Furthermore, the only kind of food that was available for them is fish. Probably you will think fish is enough, who wouldn't like fish?, but did you think about what would they do in Winter ?. Probably not, the article states that, they freeze what they would have fished in the Summer and keep it for the harsh Winter. As you can see, fewer cars in two decades will be extremely impossible.
Second, people will still use cars in the future no matter how advanced they will become. People will not use aircrafts or rockets to get to their five minutes away work-offices or schools. For instance, few years ago, when I was studying space engineering in Egypt. I remember one day one of our associate professors Dr. Ahmad was giving us a lecture about the uses of rockets in two decades from now. He talked about how fast and safe it will be. While he was talking, one of the student raised his hand and asked, "will the rockets be used on earth?". The professor laughed and said, "off-course not, It is going to be really dangerous". He states that, rockets have been built on the idea of the lighter the weight the faster the speed, so not so many people can get on board, It is only maximum of ten, and that not only because of the weight but also the cost. He said, in the future eighty percent of the population will be middle class families, they will not be able to afford the cost. The lecture made me realize in twenty years from now, people will not be so advanced and rich to get rid of using cars.
In sum, I do-not think people will stop using cars in the future. Not only because some communities will still live in poverty but also aircrafts and rockets were not built to be on earth. Every one should value the use of cars even
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...in twenty years from now. Personally, I dont agree with fact that people will no lon...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, may, really, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46572580645 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.379486423 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487903225806 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6801561602 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1923076923 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34615384615 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196320872587 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600843254126 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586586010976 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133628064985 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348582561654 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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