Based on the given materials, the article as well as the lecture discusses traveling to the mars. The author states that due to some proposed problems this mission is impossible. The lecturer provides several ideas to repudiate this problem.
Intially, it is alleged in the reading that the cargo of a spaceship is limited and while a travel to the mars can takes two years it is impossible to supply enough food, water, and oxygen for the crew. However, the lecturer explains the Hydropanics technique which is cultivating plant in water so it occupies less space. Also she alludes to the fact not only that these plants release water in vapor which can be aggregated and be used but also absorb carbon dioxide, as a result astrounautes will have fresh air and water.
Second, the writer proclaims that living for too long in zero gravity, people on the mars will suffer from severe medical damages as the loose muscle and bone mass. Yet again, the speaker underscores that these problems can be solved. People on the ship can do excersices to prevent muscle reduction and by consuming vitamins and calcium they can prevent the bone density lose.
Finally, the author mentions that while on earth the magnetic field protect us from sun's radiations, in the space carrying an artificial shield would add too much weight. On the other hand, the lecturer explains that since sun's activity is not constant so is not the space radiations. The people in the space will not be exposed to these radiation all the time so there is no need for a big shield. They can equip the ship with a system to monitor the activities plus a small shield and when needed go to a protected area.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'travel'.
Suggestion: travel
...rgo of a spaceship is limited and while a travel to the mars can takes two years it is i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'take'
Suggestion: take
...ited and while a travel to the mars can takes two years it is impossible to supply en...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ant in water so it occupies less space. Also she alludes to the fact not only that t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 333, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this radiation' or 'these radiations'?
Suggestion: this radiation; these radiations
...ple in the space will not be exposed to these radiation all the time so there is no need for a ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, second, so, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73720136519 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42566332387 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587030716724 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.601722046 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.769230769 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0502747227982 0.272083759551 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0161501417244 0.0996497079465 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0200623330237 0.0662205650399 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0277476044205 0.162205337803 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00715154751906 0.0443174109184 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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