Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens.
Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Every scoiety or country are running behind success and are in competiton with every other society or country. In this persuit of success we are forgetting the main reasone to be better or more successful which is well being of all indivisual citizens. Infact a society is dermined by the its citizens not the other way around. Therefore, i strongly disagree with notion that a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its indivisual citizens in order to thrive.
For example consider japan, japan is one of the most successfull and fast devloping country and the peole of japan are extreamly hardworking and dilligent but japan also have the highest sucide rate and dipression rate because of work related preasure. so the quetion is does this success of japan worth when their citizens are not happy? no. If the work related presure would be less there would less suicide rate and people will be more happy, yes it is true that in this case japan would be less successful that it is now but how do we measure success ? is it meterial or money do we have or hapiness, peace and more time with family ? according to me a true defination of success is a balance between both.
Another example is that if a society is putting its own overall success before the well being of its citizens then what is the difference between this society and a society which is ruled by a dictator and who is only worried about the success of his country and not well being of its population. Success of a society is measured on the basis of success and well being of its people and it should remain that way. if people of a society are well and happy it will ultimately make the society better and more successfull.
concluding my essay i would say that well being of the people of society should be the ultimate priority of a society and the overall success of a society should never be put before the well-being of the indivisual people of the society. Ensuring the well being of people of society will ultemately lead to a better and more successful society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, well, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 370.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62432432432 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47026922148 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418918918919 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3528527239 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.214285714 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.49789568761 0.243740707755 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198855414061 0.0831039109588 239% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168845762538 0.0758088955206 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.360664076954 0.150359130593 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161810741704 0.0667264976115 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.