TPO31- independent Writing:
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
it goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, human beings confront with a great speed of changes due to the technological developments. however, recently, there has been an active controversy among the people over the very notion that whether this new developments lead to have happier and more satisfied people in the world or it just made them conversely sadder. although it is a little hard to reach a consensus, I personally adhere to the view that modern human is more likely to be sad and unsatisfied. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To begin with, in today's complicated life, people encounter with more economic burdens. they are constantly active to gain a subsistence wage to provide their necessities. In another word, they have to dedicate the majority of their time in a day to work, therefore there will not remain enough time to spend on their beloved activities such as going out with their family, playing game with children or even reading a good novel. An example can drive this notion home. I have worked for a top-notch company in a metropolis for last ten years; as other people say always I'm looking like a very happy individual with a prosperous job and a great family. however, my job with all the good point that it has, do not satisfy me. I have to work for prolonged time in a day. since my work-time is too long I do not have enough time to see my husband and my son. So this is very frustrating for me to continue such life. Nevertheless, my grandfather had a very ordinary job in a little local store. although he had a very low income, he had been always very glad because he do whatever he wished in his leisure time. Had I had a normal job like my grandfather, I would have been happier in my life.
In another point of view, thanks to the advanced technological breakthrough, we have access to a wide range of new facilities which can make our life easier and bring us an array of merits. however, these technologies are like a double-edged sword which has both merits and demerits. however I subscribe to the view that their drawbacks outweigh their benefits. they could turn us to people who always are seeking for diversity and variety in our life. since we see every new day a new version of technologies, such as mobile phones, cloths and cars, it is possible to become individuals keen to possess every new things we face with. As a case in point, as an in-depth study conducted in some developing countries indicated a hefty of citizens in todays' societies changed their mobile phone and house’s decorations once a year. While, it is no secret to anyone that this is just a sign of changeability and being fickle. On the other hand we definitely know that in our modern societies the percentage of people who is likely to catch depression are enhancing each year.
In conclusion, drawn upon the aforementioned reasons, I do believe that in todays' life people are less happy than they were in the past. because not only do they work harder than before and have less leisure time, but also we have more depressed people in our modern and progressed societies comparing to the past decades due to quick changes in the advent of new technologies, mods and fashions which make the people confused in the essence of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 589.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68421052632 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72613729229 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499151103565 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0300509126 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.115384615 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6538461538 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210802189949 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526122275115 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641826736575 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141553618521 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767275893601 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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