Most of the people are aware of beneficial and non-beneficial health activities that they were supposed to do, but many chooses to consistently patronize doing the unhealthy ones. This essay will discuss the two sides of the argument.
Firstly, everyone were delighted to indulge in too much work, although their body needs proper exercise as well. To illustrate, people who use to work 12 hours per day, arrived in their respected homes exhausted, so all they do is sit, eat and relax while watching television. They do not bother to go for exercise. As a result, diabetes, heart problems and hype...
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Please advise me on what part
Please advise me on what part of this essay that I will try to improve for me to achieve band 7 score? Thank you.
You got 7.0 if there are no
You got 7.0 if there are no grammatical issues.
Thank you now I have an idea
Thank you now I have an idea what are the things I need to work out with.
but many chooses to consistently patronize
but many choose to consistently patronize
Sentence: To illustrate, people who use to work 12 hours per day, arrived in their respected homes exhausted, so all they do is sit, eat and relax while watching television.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and sit
Sentence: In addition to, sedentary lifestyle.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence?
most people in the society is facing today.
most people in the society are facing today.
Meanwhile, drinking vast amount of water, sleeping at list 6-8 hours, getting enough sunlight and having a positive mental attitude contributes to a healthy activities
Meanwhile, drinking vast amount of water, sleeping at list 6-8 hours, getting enough sunlight and having a positive mental attitude contribute to a healthy activities
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No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.942 4.6
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