Although letter from the parent of a student from the Kensington Academy has highlighted an issue, by writing about replacing cafeteria vendor, Swift Nutritons because their son and his friends don't like food's taste and It might happen that other students can bring their own unhealthy food which will undermine the school's aim to serve healthy food,but there is a need to answer few questions, which can make parent's argument weak and unreliable for the action i.e replacement of cafeteria vendor Swift Nutrition.
First, the Parent has considered Swift Nutrition vendor as a vapid food provider company by just merely relying on a single complaint of their son and friends. A parent should have asked if this type of food is served regularly or weekly or this is the first time? because the answer to this question could have verified many misconceptions about cafeteria vendors.
Also, Parent has directly stated that if Swift Nutrition vendor would be serving such insipid healthy food, then other students will take their unhealthy food to the school. Many questions need to be answered here in order to evaluate such a direct statement like Swift Nutrition food vendor could not change their food's taste? and If students are taking their own food then surely, it would be unhealthy ?. If a parent has considered this question before making such a direct statement about student's food and Swift Nutrition food vendor then they might have not made such a statement that can easily be flawed by answers of these questions.
Moreover, the Parent has directly concluded with the statement about replacing the Swift Nutrition food vendor. They should have considered if Swift food vendor can change their style of food which can be healthy and taste at the same time? If the answer would be 'yes' then replacing a food vendor that can provide healthy and delectable food at the same time, is a boon. Also, what if another food vendor will also be giving such a vapid food to the students ? or what if there would be no other food vendor who could provide healthy and delectable food at the same time? then the parent's recommendation would be a serious issue.
In conclusion, I would suggest parents consider a few questions before writing such letters to the school's principal about the Swift Nutrition food vendor, which relies on assumptions and lack of evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 1938 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.845 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.435 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.692 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.51 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.707 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.236 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...itons because their son and his friends dont like foods taste and It might happen th...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...ne the schools aim to serve healthy food,but there is a need to answer few questions...
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Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
... there is a need to answer few questions,which can make parents argument weak and unre...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Parent
...ngle complaint of their son and friends.Parent should have asked if this type of food ...
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Line 4, column 258, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...y or weekly or this is the first time ? because the answer for this question could have...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... Nutrition vendor would be serving such a insipid healthy food, then other studen...
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Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Many
...take their unhealthy food to the school.Many questions need to be answered here to i...
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Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...or could not change their foods taste ? and If students are taking their own food t...
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Line 10, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e same time? If answer would be yes then replacing a food vendor which can provid...
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Line 10, column 363, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...ctable food at the same time, is a boon.Also, what if another food vendor will also ...
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Line 10, column 453, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
...ing such a vapid food to the students ? or what if there would be no other food ve...
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Line 10, column 564, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...y and deluctable food at the same time? then parents recommendation would be a serio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11979166667 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55150994455 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442708333333 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.244690251 57.8364921388 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.833333333 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 23.324526521 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151244232402 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768237836051 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501700840438 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12295586051 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045939230076 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 14.3799401198 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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