Some people believe that competition helps children to be better prepared for their future, while others say that competition can be harmful for children and should be limited to adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Opinions differ as to whether the competitiveness should be encouraged among pupils for their better prospects or this negatively affects children therefore ought to be strict to the young adults. As both the viewpoints have their own arguments, I, like many others, would side with the latter viewpoint on this matter.
Obtaining desirable results for their career, competitiveness should be incorporated among children in the early age. In this fierce-competitive era, scores play a pivotal role for students to confirm seat in Tier-A college or university which further likely to assist for embarking with the prosperous professional life. In order to ensure higher grades in school life, competition had better to instil in students. For instance, if schools will motivate students to compete with classmates, they tend to thrive to be better over their counterparts and that will be fruitful to yield the positive academic results. With this, overall performance of entire class can be improved as well as they can climb their career ladder for better prospects.
I, however, believe students are not mature enough to cope with the defeat. Only a few students can secure top positions in the class hence rest all may consider themselves as inefficient to be on the higher positions in the class and are likely develop grudges for toppers. This behaviour not only harmful for them for their school time but also can pose a threat to their future lives with their colleagues. Mounting stress among the juveniles is the outcome of the phenomenon of increased competition. Adults, on the other hand, have more potential than students to confront the failure. UPSC aspirants in India are good precedents who keep doing diligent work after not clearing the test twice even.
In conclusion, despite the benefit for ensuring higher academic excellence among school students , I believe the drawbacks, severe burden as well as hatred feeling for peers, of strengthening competition among them are too dire to ignore.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinions differ as to whether the competitiveness should be encourage...
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Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cademic excellence among school students , I believe the drawbacks, severe burden ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25696594427 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82545503576 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603715170279 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1296870513 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.285714286 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354101594236 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119406757767 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103143895591 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215556130046 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085552499484 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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