While it may be true that investment in Consolidated Industries can bring benefits, this author's argument does not make a cogent case for increased demand based on cooler climate and new homes builted. It is easy to understand that why heating oil will have an increased demand, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to recommand in investing the company.
One problem with the argument is that climate forecasters estimate that this region will continue having belownormal temperatures for several years in winter. Whereas, the author neglects that whether this forecast is reliable. Since the movement of the atmosphere is always changing, as well as human activities may have an impact on the weather, even their words tell the truth at present , they can not promise this will always right. Furthermore, there are difference data between weather forcast stations, for the technology of the facility and methods used to calculate, the results from some of them appeal more creadible. Thus, it is also necessary to review this weather forecast station's pasted statistic as to see whether their conclusion is true.
It seems reasonable that new houses waited to be built and the cold weather results in much more comsume in heating oil, which act as the mayor fuel for heating. In a way, it is obvious that the using in resources for obtaing heat inevitably will ascend. Nevertheless, heating oil is not the only substance that can be tranferred for providing heat, there are other materials such as nature gas and other new energy resources that can be utilized. In addition, those new energy may be cleaner and cheaper. These advantages can attract many people change their preference, or even the government may carry out regulations encouraging using cleaner energy for protecting the environment.
On the ground of the assumption from the mentioned above, taking investment in Consolidated Industries is rational in some degree. More energy is needed in considertaion of sustaining low temperature and growing quantity of residents, while Consolidated Industries is not the only one who offers retail sale or the best choice. For the company's oil may have of poor quality as well as inefficiency in working patterns. There can be safer if first doing a survey on the comany's actual status before doing the investment in case losing money.
A rational weather report with previous accurate data and the heating oil still acts as the main resource, leads to reasonable increasement in cosuming more heating oil. For these reasons, it is a good idea to have investment.However, this author's argument is not likely significantly persuade the resident to take the investment.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 445 350
No. of Characters: 2243 1500
No. of Different Words: 243 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.593 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.04 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.844 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ities may have an impact on the weather, even their words tell the truth at prese...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...en their words tell the truth at present , they can not promise this will always r...
^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...heating oil, which act as the mayor fuel for heating. In a way, it is obvious tha...
^^
Line 9, column 227, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...s, it is a good idea to have investment.However, this authors argument is not likely si...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, whereas, while, as to, in addition, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17117117117 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85066609492 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542792792793 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3488824226 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.555555556 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20656836967 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655248778302 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440023732241 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111793525617 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337464367214 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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