In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago
According to the author, the number of accident in the Prunty county has not decreased even though the speed limit of the vechiles was maintained. The number of the accident in the Butler County was decreased after the completion of five road improvement proect, so, the author concluded that Prunty County should undertake take the road improvement proect inj order to reduce the road accident. In order to bolster his conclusion, the author cited some conclusion but that are not enough to make the argument lucid.
Firstly, the author mention that the number of the accident in the Prunty County was not decreased but he fails to put the statistical data regarding to the number of the accident that occur in particular city. Similarly, the author also mention that the many number of the has not decreased the speed limit that was mentioned but fails to present the statistical data or percentage of the driver who have done it. So, in order to bolster the argument author should mention the statistical data regarding to the number of accident and number of drivers who violated the speed limit rule.
Secondly, the author assumes that the accident was occurred due to the excess speed of the vechiles but he fails to mention the other situation of the particular highway. The number of the accident might be due to the improper road condition or the lack of footpath for the street walker people or might be due to high number of newly license holder drivers, etc. So, in order to make the argument more lucid and strong, author must include these information.
At last but not the least, the author has assume that the road improvement proect that was success in the Butler County to decreased the number of the accident will be applicable in the Prunty County also buthe fails to represent the comparision of these two County. There might be possible that the decreased number of the accident the Butler county is due to the more number of experienced drivers or better management of the people who walks in the roadside areas, etc. imilarly the author should also mention the number of the accident hat occur and reduced after completion of the proect in order to make the argument more strong and lucid.
In sum, the author must provide these evidences in order to bolster his argument.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1872 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.727 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.396 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.213 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.544 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.756 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.24 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...larly, the author also mention that the many number of the has not decreased the speed limi...
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...e lucid and strong, author must include these information. At last but not the least, the autho...
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Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
... last but not the least, the author has assume that the road improvement proect that w...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82828282828 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4389534182 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.348484848485 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.5877120212 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.076923077 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4615384615 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180267919875 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821479988222 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600515964654 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106015283145 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610943353396 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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