Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent decades, many governments have considerable expenditure on the improvement of citizens’ lifestyle. Although some argue that medical treatments for ill people are much more important, the preventive measures have proved their sake in the long run.
There are many reasons why changes in people’s lifestyle have more long-term benefits. Firstly, the provision of public infrastructure helps citizens enhance their health, which leads to the effects on a large scale. For example, in a family, if parents have a healthy lifestyle, they will have a naturally positive impact on their children on a daily basis. Secondly, creating a balanced lifestyle brings people good health conditions, which help them have sufficient energy and enthusiasm to work and study. In fact, the health of each person that results in the power of a nation’s workforce, especially the younger generations, which is a vital factor in the development of its economy.
On the other hands, the method of providing treatments for patients also proves some certain drawbacks.
The one thing is as ailments are not temporary problems, the efforts that have gone into curing them may not take the root of these problems. The fact is that ailments result from the long process of accumulation through daily habits, so the most effective method is changing these habits gradually. Another thing is the expenditure of upgrading the whole of the medical system is an enormous number with any governments. Therefore, this isn’t really the best choice in this situation, compared with the expense of preventive methods.
In conclusion, it is true that enhancing people’s lifestyle brings more benefits instead of focusing on curing more and more patients in the long term. The governments should consider spending more and more budget in health infrastructure so as to improve the medical conditions of the public.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 15, column 245, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, another thing, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43333333333 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97464096806 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.7572760068 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.428571429 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8571428571 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184844986028 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618195848123 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650384745346 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109430537581 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666445253063 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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