It is clear that no one wants without any rule or constitution. However, some societies established rules that are very hard to follow especially for youngsters. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, some of the rules that young members of society are supposed to follow will hurt their future. Governments' decisions affect many people and as a result, they have to contemplate all of the aspects when they are passing rules and laws. If that they do not pay attention to side-effects of their decisions, they unconsciously or sometimes consciously pose negative impacts on youths' life. For instance, in my country, every 18-year-old boy must serve the military for two years after high school graduation. Our leader states that we want to be ready for every threat, so having trained troops is our single option. If this law considered more meticulously, its drawbacks would surface vividly. Everyone knows that if graduate students spend two years in military camps learning about shooting and desert camouflage, no university would accept them due to the drastic education gap that would be present in their resume. As it is clear, this single law would hurt our future to the extent that no one can get academic education.
Secondly, some rules have to do with young people's personal life. One of the aspects of developed societies is respecting its members' intimacy. However, even in the modern world, we can observe countries that do not revere people's personal life by applying rules that are too strict to follow. For instance, the other day I read an article about a state in South Africa. The governor has instructed that bachelors are not allowed to marry unless they reach 30 years old. Psychologists have surveyed the repercussions of this law and found that the rate of sexual misuse and rape have increased after passing this law. Moreover, some youngsters who are educated and do not practice these dangerous behaviours, showed symptoms of depression and introversion in their conducts. The report mentioned that some youngs who do not follow the order and marry secretly, will spend rest of their life in jail.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that rules in modern societies are so harsh to young members. Not only do they hurt their future, but they interfere with youths' intimacy as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the following essay. To begin with, some of the rules that young members of society are...
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Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...d as a result, they have to contemplate all of the aspects when they are passing rules and...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...es consciously pose negative impacts on youths life. For instance, in my country, ever...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96733668342 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64927678016 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560301507538 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2543107407 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180674213733 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602346871103 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688863942946 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127012819401 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392919051327 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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