Without a doubt, finding secure job is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Recently, we are living in very dynamic world and we have to find secure job to adopt the new life. I am sure that some people would believe that in the past we can identify the secure job opportunity easier than today, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally disagree that it was easier to catch the secure job in the past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, universities provide wonderful opportunities for networking, and people can use these to find and create high paying jobs following their graduation. Nowadays, people can get access to many multinational copmaines faster than before. My brother's experience is a compelling example of this. In fact, my brother in the last year at his medical school. Last samer, his university invited him to attend job fair inside the campus. Moreover, the college hired encouraged many comapnies to build stand to make promotion to their products and get in touch with the students. Furthermore, my brother would able to get in touch with a huge medical devices company. In addition, he provided them with his resume which conatins a lot of knowledge about his personality. So, after his graduation he got connected with this organization, and he made interviews with the managers. As a result, he impressed his interviewers with his great experience and knowledge. So, he got a valuable position at this comapny with a promising salary. Consequently, he can live the life that he always dreamed of with his family. On the other hand, in the past, students could not be able to join any business fair and they did not know any information about any jobs. So, it was so hard for them to find job following their graduation. As you can see, today, people can find tremendous job opportunities easier than in the past.
In addition, internet and advanced technology help people to get access to endless supply of job positions according to their intrests. Nowadays, we can find a lot of job advertising over the face book and twitter. For instance, my daughter just graduated from art school and she was looking for job online. In fact, she found some experts online and they gave her chance to hangout with them. Becides, they made like open chat between students to figer out much more careers channels. Moreover, my daughter got chance to consult many professionals people over the face book about which position is suitable for her according to her previous background. So, she get access to a deep and meaningful way of thinking. Consequently, she decided which field she has to move forward to start her practical life. As a result, she is working in a good reputation art school due to the great feedback that she got from the internet.
In conclusion, I disgree that people in the past would able to decide which career is more secure easier than today. This is because the universities allow students to get in touch with a great networking source, and because students can consult experts through the advanced way on communication.
- TOEFL TPO 40 - Integrated Writing Task 73
- TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-20 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, it had been common practice since the late 1960s no to suppress natural forest fires. The “let it burn” policy assumed that forest fire would burn themselves out quickly, without causing much dama 78
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 655, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devices'' or 'device's'?
Suggestion: devices'; device's
...ble to get in touch with a huge medical devices company. In addition, he provided them ...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...o their intrests. Nowadays, we can find a lot of job advertising over the face book and twit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 663, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...ing to her previous background. So, she get access to a deep and meaningful way of ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2633.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83119266055 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70716146017 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48623853211 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 815.4 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4342928191 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.935483871 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5806451613 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.74193548387 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139548890855 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396370880639 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039330700553 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925502604702 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387004911294 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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