The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000
The given bar chart provides us with information on world water using in 2000. All the numbers were estimated in percentage. According to the chart, it can be clearly seen that, the biggest portion of water spent in agriculture with 70%.
To begin with consumed water around the world, it's avarage 22% is used for industry, Similarly, the lowest 8% point is belong to domestic.
As we can see from the the table, in Canada the water almost did not use for agriculture, it consist of only 8%. In contrast, this point is about as 8 times high as in Chine, and there were 22% water ion domestic. Likewise, in India, joined of the domestic and industry is constituted merely 8%. The rest 92% of water is consumed for agriculture. In terms of New Zealand there were approximately equal pint with 44% for agriculture and domestic.
As a final point, it is interesting to note that, Canada was a country which used of the most water to industry (80%).
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Sentence: To begin with consumed water around the world, it's avarage 22 is used for industry, Similarly, the lowest 8 point is belong to domestic.
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