playing video games
Our times are changing, nowadays, many stimuli are changing our behavior. As we know, video games are one of these. Although some people may say that playing video games is not a waste of time, and in contrast, it is a good source of entertainment. It is clear to me that playing video games is affecting our children in an unpredictable way. And I have two reasons to support my preference.
First of all, when children are playing video games, their capacity to communicate with others reduces. Therefore they will become a person without social skills, and probably they will have problems to relate with other. For example, my nephew all day is playing video games in his house, and he has only one friend. Furthermore, he does not like to speak with people because he is afraid to say something wrong. On the other hand, when I was young, I did not have video games and spent all day playing with my friends outside. That interaction allowed me to enhance my social skills.
Second, children who spend a lot of time without doing some physical activity will become unhealthy people when they grow up. Many investigations relate some diseases with sedentary people. For instance, children who do not do physical activities are overweight, and they will become obese. It probably that they will get any heart disease.
Finally, playing video games will affect our children profoundly, mainly in social and health issues. However, we can use this kind of entertainment with responsibility and aware of its results. Moreover, it is important to understand the real impact of those video games. In fact, we must continuously lead our children in the right way that allows them to make better decisions.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
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| 2019-12-05 | Hector Padilla | 68 | view |
| 2019-11-11 | alimohammadi1 | 3 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unpredictable way" with adverb for "unpredictable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...g video games is affecting our children in an unpredictable way. And I have two reasons to support my p...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ity to communicate with others reduces. Therefore they will become a person without socia...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90344827586 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66165799937 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565517241379 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3386216741 49.2860985944 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.8421052632 110.228320801 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360338460183 0.272083759551 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126331019292 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158503642772 0.0662205650399 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236049900818 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156007574468 0.0443174109184 352% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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