In the letter from the parent of a student to the principal of a school, the parent claims that the school's good intention to serve healthier lunch to all the students might backfire. The conclusion is based on weak several unstated assumptions which might undermine the validity of the prediction. Three questions need to be answered to decide if the conclusion holds water.
Firstly, did the complaining parent consult with all the parents? It might be possible that most of the parents had no complains. Although she cites the opinion of her son as well as "several" friends, it might be possible that 3 out of 1000 students did not like the food. In fact, most of the parents might be happy because the school's serving a healthy diet. The author needs to provide evidence if she were writing on behalf of all parents or not.
How could she be confident that the intent of hiring a new caterer was to provide a healthy food? It might be possible that Swift Nutrition provided a cheaper tender and the school management opted for it. Perhaps, the school was out of profit and providing low-fat, low-calorie food was one of its plan to make money. The author needs ask the school's intent to hire Swift Nutrition.
Finally, how can she be confident on the fact that Swift Caterer provides a low-fat, low-calories food? Perhaps, the author might have heard it in a radio 10 years ago. It might not be the case now. In fact, Swift Caterer might provide healthier as well as tasty option for most of the students. If it were true, it would definitely undermine the basis of the argument.
In conclusion, the argument has several unstated assumptions, which can undermine its validity.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1354 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.605 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.475 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.046 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
..., Swift Caterer might provide healthier as well as tasty option for most of the st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, so, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79591836735 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67792293197 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503401360544 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1801689671 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213952749599 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690598777806 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795899716887 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118003314886 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620863821065 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.3550499002 149% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.197005988 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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